This is from Chapter 27:
The blowing red sands of Mars were light today. The evening dark shadows drifted across the Martian floor. Unseen hands positioned the electronic device deep into the shoveled aperture below the surface. Layers of sand applied over the wires and red lights caused the item to disappear.
An ahbot, robots created by ahmans, strolled by noticing the bent figure on the ground. It walked over and asked, “What are you doing here?” As soon as the robot had uttered its question, the person swung the shovel slicing across the ahbot’s midsection exposing its internal controls.
The metal creature began to explode as the man brought the shovel down again at the head of the ahbot lying upon the dusty red surface as it tried to grasp something with its right jerking arm. Laughing in his protective suit the man made sure the thing was lifeless as he brought down the shovel splitting the head in two.
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“I don’t know. It just seems so silly, but when I put the pieces all together….” She stopped. He looked trustworthy and handsome in a dark sort of way, good tan maybe? Continuing, “My boyfriend is a very influential rich man. I first met him at an art show in New York City, but I have noticed that when he wants something nothing stands in his way of attaining his goal.” Noticing the patience the officer was expressing, she continued on.
“Well, I heard something and I could be wrong, and he explained it away; but it is bothering me, so here I am.”
“What did you hear?” Alex asked simply.
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“This here is your guard dog, for the lady.” Frank explained peering into the house.
“Oh, come on in,” then looking at the dog, “is it housebroke?” Alex asked.
“Uh, no, I’ll tie him up out here.” Frank wrapped the rope around one of the porch supports and trailed into the house behind Alex.
Jan was sitting on the couch when the two men entered the main room.
“Jan,” Alex began, “This is an old friend of mine, Frank Wolf.”
“Frank,” she acknowledged nodding her head. Alex turned toward Frank and offered his school chum one of the chairs at the table.
“So Frank, what brings you by here? I don’t need anyone for Jan until tomorrow?”
“I brought that dog out here to help. He’s not much of an attack dog, but he sure loves to bark a lot at anythin’ movin’.”
“A dog?” Jan leaned forward. “I have never taken care of a dog. Where is it?” Her curiosity was mounting fast.
“He’s out on the porch,” Frank replied getting up and walking toward the door. Jan and Alex followed close behind.
There on the porch was this hairy mongrel panting, drool dripping, and shaggy tail wagging back and forth so hard it made the whole dog’s body shake.
“Oh,” Jan said with caution, “He’s big,” was all Jan could say.
“What kind of dog is he Frank?” Alex asked smiling because he knew about his friend’s dog raising abilities or lack of one.
“Well, somewhere he’s got Blue Heeler, some shepherd, some wolfhound I think, and maybe a pointer or two.”
Everyone at that moment started laughing while the dog just sat there taking these happy humans all in. Suddenly he barked, loud.
“Whoa, that’s a loud one,” Alex exclaimed, “What’s his name?”
“Ralph, I named him after my granddad ‘cause he had a loud bark too.”
Jan couldn’t contain the snicker that was creeping up through her throat. She covered her mouth with her right hand to keep the laughter from getting out, but it was too late. “HooHaaHaa, oh this is too much,” Jan giggled wiping the tears from her eyes. She then moved over to the animal and scratched behind his matted ears.
“He needs a bath Frank,” Jan stated staring back at Alex’s scruffy friend. Her statement made Frank startled, like she wanted him to do it.
Don't you just hate it when you are reviewing your writing and you discover you had placed the same scene in two different chapters?
Here we go again.